Review Detail of Maaesis in Game of Lust

so i read the first 4 chapters, what i can say up to now is: the author has passion behind his story. i cant say a lot about contents, so i will focus on how the writing is. it feel very jumpy, although there are many good and appropriate words i the story its hard to follow everything. also sometimes stuff feels like it gets explained after the author realized that he forgot to do so previously. lastly i can say; dear author please dont see this review as an insult, i am trying to keep it as constructive as possible. the story sounds like it could get interesting, if you decide to work on these minor inconsistencies it`ll be very well worth a read.