Review Detail of Ancient_Egyptian in Enslaved to Zion
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So this is just a primary review ... I just read 10 chapters so This review is just a frist impression nothing more ... The story tell the tale of a girl who find herself a slave all of sudden and she was sold before she can even register what happened to her ... Her master is a cold and unfeeling business man and she is his new toy the first 10 chapters made in a good way and it's feel like this novel is not the first work of the author ... No much details about the plot or the background or even the world mentioned in this 10 chapters but the obvious thing is that the technology is more advanced but not by big margin from the real life. The frist 10 chapters are all from the POV of the heroine and only her until now ... For the Harem part, Will I don't understand it yet I can't even tell if the protagonist is male or female ( the master or the slave). And that's it if Mr. author make something worth mentioning then I will write it down in the replies sections or in another review until then .. Good luck.
Enslaved to Zion
Sultry_Sky
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Thank you very much for your insight! Believe it or not, this actually is my first time writing. When I began writing this, I had the intention of having Zion (the male master) be a bit more unfeeling and the female servants of the manor were intended to throw themselves at him so when he promises Euroah (the famale slave) that he will wait until she turns 18, he invites the maids to sleep with him as he always has. Seeing this, over time, Euroah would become jealous and realize she wants him to sleep with her as well and it would be a tender moment when he finally does. However, while I was writing, my feelings changed some and I went a bit of a different direction. I appreciate you so much for bringing this to my attention and I will change that hashtag to something more fitting! If you have any questions or would like anything clarified in a later chapter, please dont hesitate to let me know! Ive been taking it beey slow, as I intent to write this over a long period of time At the moment, I’m writing about 1 chapter per day, sometimes 2. I hope that you will continue to enjoy it! Best regards, Sultry Sky
Thanks for replying ... Though it's surprising for me to know that this is your first work ... This is promising ... anyway your changes of the primary focus of this novel saved it ... I don't like a non-harem novel that much but I read a few and as long as you don't follow the horrible Chinese example then you are safe ... Honestly the first script of your novel will not be that attractive but your instinct is praiseworthy ... I don't have questions for now and I am sure there will be others who will be more experienced to ask or suggest something good ... But I have a small request If you find your self capable and experienced enough to write a harem-based novel (In the future) without making a mess then you have my gratitude ... Good luck and happy writing for you.
Sultry_Sky:Thank you very much for your insight! Believe it or not, this actually is my first time writing. When I began writing this, I had the intention of having Zion (the male master) be a bit more unfeeling and the female servants of the manor were intended to throw themselves at him so when he promises Euroah (the famale slave) that he will wait until she turns 18, he invites the maids to sleep with him as he always has. Seeing this, over time, Euroah would become jealous and realize she wants him to sleep with her as well and it would be a tender moment when he finally does. However, while I was writing, my feelings changed some and I went a bit of a different direction. I appreciate you so much for bringing this to my attention and I will change that hashtag to something more fitting! If you have any questions or would like anything clarified in a later chapter, please dont hesitate to let me know! Ive been taking it beey slow, as I intent to write this over a long period of time At the moment, I’m writing about 1 chapter per day, sometimes 2. I hope that you will continue to enjoy it! Best regards, Sultry Sky