This novel has a lot of potential with a very solid plot. However, there are multiple grammatical and capitalization errors. These errors make the novel a bit difficult to understand and follow. Too much information is given at once. The novel won't be as intriguing if you tell out everything from the beginning. I recommend that you try and utilize the show and not tell method and try to maintain the story flow. I hope you don't get offended by my review, I'm just being honest. I wish you all the best [img=recommend]
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