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The story concept is good and got my interest. The first chapter (Prologue) was short enough it could have been put together with the second chapter. There were a few places where the dialogue was confusing, the last chapter was missing a lot of punctuations. My last suggestion would be to add more detail, take your time with each chapter. You’re doing good.

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Thank you! I'll Take your Ideas and incorporate them into the book!