This is great! Although I rarely read military works, this drew me in lol. The issue with this is the punctuations and spacing. Like I said in chapter one, u don't put full stops were they are meant to be and the same could be said for the commas. Also, try paragraphing your works. Sometimes, a long paragraph just distracts the reader and makes them lost. All in all, this is a great novelð¥°
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ãããPeNNWilaZ_PlayZ:Thank you for the review and am glad you liked it. I will fix the mistakes do sure.