I love the concept of this book and it has a lot of potentials. I noticed the first chapter has quite a number of punctuation errors and the dialogues were barely spaced. The author should work on this as it'll help the readers flow better with the book. It gets much better as you read on. Keep up the good work!â€ð¹
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