Review Detail of TaintedMetal in Make me your Nadier

This is probably the best rating I could give. I'm sorry but even though this is a few chapters so far, there are some things that need to be considered based on what I read. The Good - Readers should be familiar with this kind of genre the novel is in. - Dialogue gives insight of the characters personalities and characteristics. - Stable updates for chapters The Things that need Improvement - Although the synopsis does give insight about what the story will be, so far it isn't really moving anywhere because of the amount of text in between the characters' dialogue and the protagonist's narration - Is the formatting meant to resemble a chat log on phone/the Internet? Because even so there's a much better way of making that format, give the characters usernames, etc, instead of the initial of their names - The protagonist unfortunately sounds like someone that genuinelly shows off what's on their mind (and not in a good way) - This may be a few chapters released so far but please provide some setting. Don't just say the character is in a house/room, give us more info to fully imagine the setting, or some idea of it at least. This review was the result of the updates being the higher point, while the others need serious checks and revisions. I hope you can take the time to look back at these chapters and maybe restructure part of it. Keep on writing author, I know you can do better.