The story itself is intriguing. I somehow got tired of the very long description of the characters. Maybe if it were to be put in dialogues, it would make me feel the story. All in all, everything is fine. Your grammar, story, creativity, imagination is pretty well done.
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いいねKatanaEvans123:I feel its very important for descriptions of the characters. So you can visalized what their wearing and what their going to be doing. Not every book had them, but for mine its svery vital infomation to know further on in the book, Thanks for the review, but i feel the long descriptiosn are nessisary will try to shorten them
I feel its very important for descriptions of the characters. So you can visalized what their wearing and what their going to be doing. Not every book had them, but for mine its svery vital infomation to know further on in the book, Thanks for the review, but i feel the long descriptiosn are nessisary will try to shorten them