This seems pretty interesting so far, but I have to say: you really do need to look for synonyms for your words. In your first "chapter" (I use quotes since you said you wouldn't call it a chapter), you said the word dog so many times, it got incredibly dull. I'd recommend using the word canine every once in a while, or maybe call it a mutt since the cats would have a negative connotation toward it. The grammar was okay with minor mistakes here and there. I think I can see myself continuing to read this book as it updates.
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