Review Detail of TaintedMetal in Outside Paradise

Most of the writing is adequate and easily to follow, but it does do a good job at showing what was going on. Some paragraphs are too big and long, but it's forgivable as long as you can keep track of the story. My only real criticism is the characters, so far there hasn't been anyone standing for me personally, eventhough each is introduce in a fair way. So far so good, keep on writing, author.