Review Detail of tmoedoey in The Emperor of Magic

I really like the plot. These kind of stories just so happens to be my cup of tea. its just hard to read. The obvious grammatical errors can be overlooked but for me, it's the flow of the story that bothers me. The story seems either rushed or forced in just the first chapter. my advice; slow it down a little some to describe the settings or wut the characters look, but keep up the good work 👍👍 if you keep writing I'll keep reading.