Good story so far. It has some key features, but by the story came so far I can think what would be the end. Even though this might be a personal preference, but i think it will be great if the ending wasnt expected by the reader. But its just one idea. I dont have much experience in writing. So keep up the good work. Looking foward to read the full story.
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