well you have lots of potential ..so see others writing style and write it again .because I felt that I was reading your rough draft ..start telling stories instead of saying me my and I.. very good story.. love it ððð
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ãããRankuza:Thank you so much for the advising review . I will see to it, that I follow it well.ð