Review Detail of Seraphy64 in The Creator’s Daughter: Travel to different worlds.

the grammar is good but most of the writing, scenes and dialogue are very shallow. the relationship progression the MC had with her girlfriend was rushed, forced. it definately wasn't natural. it's a good first attempt at writing imo, and I hope the author see's all the mistakes they made and fixes them for their next fic. to soften all the criticism, I liked the fluff, even if there was so much of it, it was heartwarming. I liked the worldjumping. wasn't too keen on the whole making the MC goddess level OP so fast (or at all) as it removes any difficulty when you can just erase your problems from existence with a snap of your fingers.