You have a good writing style.I love the system stories because the plot involves a bigger setting.You have put in the right essense to hook us up in your writing .I just wanted a little bit more of the character detailing because the background you have set is really good.But still it's just minor poi ts of improvement .I loved it.enjoy writing
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