Review Detail of LordSputnik in The Tylingariea Epic

The Good: Excellent world building! The author has created multiple worlds inside one story that are well thought out! The characters, while not exactly original, are given more than enough history to stand on their own. The Bad: It reads a bit like a history book at first... Having one giant paragraph for a chapter makes it a chore to read. Don't create new chapters just to put a title... Chapters are also quite short usually. The Neutral: Having a big grand idea is great, but tying it together is always a challenge. Keep at it! Try and work on your chapter structure some, it's hard to read just a single large paragraph without proper line breaks.