Review Detail of echogillana in Parallel - A Virtual Reality.

Good Job Author! keep up the good work in creating this novel. I would just like to point out one major mistake that I saw until the latest chapter. it's about the TENSE. you should be consistent in this one. there are a lot of present tenses used that should be written in past tense also, i feel like you are telling the story. as an improvement tip, you should study about "how to show, not tell" i hope this review wont make u feel bad but rather motivate you to become better. Good luck mr. author!!