The storyline is great along with the plot but the grammar and punctuation is pretty bad. The storyline and plot support each other and you are not being confusing but the grammar and punctuation make the story hard to understand as it mess’ with how easy it is to read. I would proof read a couple of times to make sure it is ok and flows nicely
ghoul
Liked it!
いいね返事はありません。最初になろう!