Review Detail of Sokanas in Harry Potter and Deathfalls ( Hiatus )
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Only good thing about this one is that the author regularly updates his story. But the story is riddled with problems, having read all chapters to date I know nearly nothing about the character, their abilities and goals or intentions. The author routinely (every single chapter) skips swathes of time with what feels like an assumption that the reader understands what is going on. Character design is one dimensional as is the story development for the reasons given. The author hasn't really added much if anything to the world background (Harry Potter with unknown drop-in character). Tried to give it a go as I assumed this is the author's first work, but there has been no improvement; dropping :(
Harry Potter and Deathfalls ( Hiatus )
EternalGrowth
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I understand thank you for your review, I'm sorry for the time skip as i don't have much experience in writing you could even say this is one of my first novel, the character development I'm too focused on Allan and Crystal that is my bad quality, world development it will grow but I don't have much idea for character development except for Allan and Crystal maybe just make Allan change their personality, and as you aware Ron is much braver and more smarter with Harry more tougher and stronger, and draco with much kinder personality. While I want you to read it until the end i can't force it so thank you for staying with me all this time. I'm sorry for all the bad quality this novel have and thank you for this review.