Review Detail of CrinkleMania in Red Thread of Fate

Damn, the first chapter was really off-putting... That's not the greatest start for a "wonderful" story. Especially when the first sentence contains mistakes that the eyes couldn't easily pass by... Stability is mediocre... seems like you are not updating for a while. Story development, 5/5 because it SHOULD have been great. Character Design, meh, thin as a paper plate World Background, meh, I'd be a flat-earther if your offering this kind of world. 2.6/5, Here, have a stone.