This is a very interesting story. The way the background was set, how the characters were precisely described, one can fully visualize the story as it goes. The plot was also smooth and on point. This story could go a long mile with stable and adequate updates. Good start!

Oh, I loved the suspense this story is giving me. The character of Dan was somewhat rebellious yet smart-willed. I loved the way the plot moves from the description of the setting, to the thrill it was heading. A great start for me after reading the piloting chapters. Good job, Sir.

Oh, I loved the suspense so much and also the cliffhangers. This story is something a reader will not stop reading. If there's a few moee chapters, I might read it until the last part. Great start!

Second paragraph: Honestly the first chapter was compelling......

I don't know know why the other reviews were like that, but this is how I write a review. An honest and constructive review. Honestly the first story was compelling and intriguing as well. The background/setting was precisely describe. I could envisioned the exact place as if I was there with Megami. There are some parts that bothers me though by just reading the piloting chapter/s. First: the proper use of quotation, which I commented at the chapter already. And next was during a dialogue, which I also left a comment there at the chapter. A little polish will definitely give this book an edge since the story was catching.

Better seperate the lines, since it was a conversation. Put them in seperate paragraphs

This should be in single quotation ('), since the character was talking to himself or thinking in his mind.

My honest to goodness review: I hate to stop reading upto chapter 2, although I find the story interesting and the plot was piquing, but the lack of proper quotations and the space in between words were giving me a hard time to read thoroughly. Polishing needs to be done, dear author. I like the setting though, of course, it's the Philippines. My country.

I think it's best if: Albert, Maria's husband, went... & also, a.m. is morning. So either, remove the a.m. & just say 4 in the morning.

With all honesty, the piloting chapters were a bit complex, having several characters' appearance and interactions. But nonetheless, the plot was quite interesting. The ml was beyond any doubt vicious, whereas the fl was his opposite. Although it lacks cliffhangers, the flow was smooth.

Maraming salamat, Kabayan! Ingat palagi jan!

This story was interesting. How the setting/background were describe, one can vividly visualize the place and its surroundings. With regards to the characters, the author created their emotions with such intensity and clarity. There's just one thing I've noticed, one the way to narration and dialogues were put up, there should be spaces to seperate the lines of each characters, so as it won't be a bit confusing. But, all in all, it was a good start. Keep it up!