Totabott
Lv2
2024-02-09 入りましたGlobal
47.2h
読書の
31
本を読む
バッジ
2瞬間
6
Totabott23dコメントI love your story, some points in the story feels rushed thou. Like the meeting with ace! They didn’t see him for how many years but it was like a recap of the anime. I feel like you can time skip the parts where there would not be much progress. And consitrate on story building like you did in the 1st chapter. Keep up the good work✌🏻💖
Ch 61 Alabasta!- Totabott24dコメントCh 39 Chapter 39: A Week of Training and The Ship's Name.
- Totabott1mthコメント
Im still cringing about “nozomu tokoroda” what did i miss😟
"Ugh!" Sasuke groaned in pain as he was hit in the stomach flying away and he used his feet to slide to the floor as he was flying away to stop himself from flying away. - Totabott3mthコメント
It was chancy not you!!😅
"Nah, I just beat him up myself," I shrugged, "He quickly learned his place after I grabbed him by the tail and swung him around like a yoyo and smashed him into the ground face first a bunch of times." - Totabott3mthコメント
Thank youuuu!!!!🌹
Decided to upload the full fight in one chapter instead of three separate as is my usual for these kinds lengths. - Totabott3mthに返信 Na1gel
If you know you know… but you don’t know🤷🏻♀️
After all, what did I have to fear? I have a Charizard now.