Thanks for the suggestion, I have tried to somewhat improve it.

thanks love

The story is great, the pacing doesn't feel rushed or slow and the dual perspectives really enhance the reading experience...... Keep going like this and readers will love your book soon.

The starting was really good and the pacing is good as well.... but I noticed was the naming of the weapons.. I think you should pull from myths

Sorry mate.... I did add ____________ to seperate scenes... but somehow while copying the text... it wasn't copied.. I've fixed it now... thanks for the heads up

I've posted it bruv... check it out

The story is overall really interesting... the characters feel alive and their interactions seem real..... the pacing is slower than others... but I like it.. A lot... Expecting a lot from you story Zartex

goooooddddd

really cool start.... but bro what does asunder mean?

its like 1700

Don't worry ..... It won't be

The Ahsboar is like an wild boar that's three times bigger than normal and 2 sharp teeth in front the stone claw is like a black bear, covered in stone-scales. like an armor

Tbh, the concept is very innovative and world building is really great. the punctuations can use some work but other than that... It is a good read.....

The start is really good. But I think, you should work a little more on your punctuation usage. It would elevate the reading experience .

That's the thing, brother.. It feels like I disclosed everything. But in reality, I've not even revealed 25% of it... Stay tuned for next chapters.. and soon you'll see.

its was great, man.... keep updating

Off to a really good start...

Your story really interesting... to be honest it has a lot of potential... the grammar seems a bit rough now.. but I'm sure you'll improve it so, best of luck for your journey ✨️

A great read indeed.. But I think you should work just a little harder on your dialogues.. and it would be perfect

Hello guys, I'm the author of this Novel who is shamelessly leaving a 5 star review.. I really appreciate every new reader, I really do... My story has only began.. and it has a long way to go. You see, my dream is to make an anime. On the same level as Naruto. so please help me on this journey to achieve my dream... Thank you all 😄😄😊