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Why is it that he is "full of spiritual energy" and can do all these godly actions, yet no one can sense any spiritual energy in him.
The base ideas are there and with some tweaks the story can be very well done, In all honesty it seems to suffer from the same things that some of my early collegiate papers suffer from. It may be as simple as the ideas in your head arising faster than what is typed out to cause you to occasionally move on to describing a future thought before fully hashing our the current plot details and explanation. This is common for creative people with active imaginations, the solution is to have one or two people with different perspectives read through before hand so to highlight areas that need clarification that you may have overlooked in your creative process. It's not a bad thing, just gives the appearance of a rough work in progress at the start. The only other solution would be attempting to work on another project then coming back to it with a fresh perspective, but this can cause you to sometimes mix up plot lines and character information among the different projects.
The original start of this story was something that led me to look forward to how things would develop. Sadly as the story progressed it became a poor drama with disorganized training montages and fight scenes that were lack luster. Major plot lines appear inserted almost at random. Add that to the fact that supporting characters abilities change in several location in the story give the appearance that the storyline is the result of friends throwing together ideas over lunch without proper structuring and follow up review or edits. I would say it has a lot of potential but needs reread and adjusted in several spots in order for its true potential to emerge. I will give you kudos for not making the same mistake as some authors and blatantly plagiarizing everyday brands and ideas throughout the story though.
It said that she broke through to 6th stage after their earlier "cultivation" session.
Coos? He talks about his father dying when he was young, leaving the family in poverty. Who momma been banging for spare mana to have a toddler who's too young to speak.
Anyone else notice how he goes from not being able to hold himself up from muscle stiffness to wanting to walk all over a city after some short reading. Take in mind this is after a long soak in a tub and a shower did little to alleviate it. The rule manual must have healing properties, cause I never seen anyone heal up muscle fatigue by just sitting still and reading a bit.
Shovel em down he'll, slap some jelly or preserve on em, roll em up and stuff em down in one bite each, they crepes not half inch thick buckwheat pancakes. They are thinner than an Army Chow Hall omelette.
yep those long shits can be exhausting, lol.
Ok, the inner monologuing between MC and system make this worth reading alone.
This MC is hysterical. I have laughed more during one chapter of this story than any of the other dozens that I've read.