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WritingInShadow

WritingInShadow

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2023-10-28 入りましたGlobal
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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    に返信 Rara_Jasmin

    Thank you. I found it.

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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    に返信 Hartika_Sharma

    Thank you for your nice comment. Much appreciated.

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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
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    the storytelling is great. the world details are nice, giving me the same vibe as Gantz-0. I am not at chapter 13 but most characters that had been introduced and become a part of their little group are males. I hope you can also add female characters as well. Keep writing.

    Apocalyptic World: I've Got The Second System
    ゲーム · Solastius_Seena
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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
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    His skill can be useful for tactical operations.

    Ch 6 Hunting Day
    Apocalyptic World: I've Got The Second System
    ゲーム · Solastius_Seena
    detail
  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    コメント

    I was skeptical about Randy's motive for befriending him but you got me wrong there. So sad he had to be left behind.

    Ch 2 Countdown to Survival
    Apocalyptic World: I've Got The Second System
    ゲーム · Solastius_Seena
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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    コメント

    wow. nice suspense. this got me hooked.

    Ch 1 100 Ways to Die in Apocalyptic World
    Apocalyptic World: I've Got The Second System
    ゲーム · Solastius_Seena
    detail
  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    発表

    This is nice to read but I do hope that the FMC will get her character development later in the story instead of just getting help from Leo all the time and being stepped on by another

    Silver Serenade
    ファンタジー · Rara_Jasmin
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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    に返信 Solastius_Seena

    Thank you for the review and comments. I will consider your suggestions and use them to improve my writing. This is much appreciated.

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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    に返信 Visionary_M

    Thank you, Sir. I am planning to release 25 - 30 chapters focusing on Ark. The second and Main part will be about the seven sons. Since I am just a new writer I decided to just go chronologically on this one and started with Ark, instead of starting with the seven sons and going for flashbacks. I thought it would be risky for a beginner like me if I went for the second approach.

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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    発表

    Though I am not a big fan of romantic stories this one might be exempted. Also, this is not only just about romance. Both Zachary and Sonia really complement each other. The addition of humor to the story is great as well. Both of them not knowing how to really behave around each other is funny to read. I'll be reading some more of this. My only suggestion that might be of help is to use simple words since I believe that the simpler it is the better. Using simple words can be helpful since some readers are not using English as their primary language so they may find it difficult to understand some. At least that is my opinion. I hope that can help.

    I Wish I Could Love You
    ファンタジー · Visionary_M
    detail
  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    コメント

    So. He was transported to a modern world, but this modern world has vampires in it. Do these vampires live in secrecy, or are they living in the open?

    Ch 3 Chapter 2
    I Wish I Could Love You
    ファンタジー · Visionary_M
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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    に返信 Reshoph

    Thank you Sir.

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  • WritingInShadow
    WritingInShadow7mth
    発表

    Good start. I am a big fan of apocalyptic type of stories like this one, so my hope is high. You can also improve the number of words being used per chapter.

    Free-zing
    ファンタジー · Reshoph
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