MegMerrilies
Lv13
Crochety old bean reading and writing books.
2023-07-09 入りましたGlobal
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MegMerrilies7dコメントAnd so the bullied, becomes the bully...
"I hope he's not in jail himself by then..." I laughed, as I held the bar with a satisfied smile, "And if I hear you using my name from that filthy mouth of yours again, I'm going to knock every one of those teeth out with this metal bar. Is that clear?"- MegMerrilies7dコメント
Appreciation goes a long way ❤️
Surprised, I opened the glove compartment and saw several pieces of paper with bills to pay. Leafing through the papers, I found a bill for $130 and I decided to pay it. - MegMerrilies7dに返信 MegMerrilies
You have to burn more calories than you take in..for example he could lose 2lbs per week of he ate 500 less cals and burned 500 cals..
Considering that a normal body burns about 2,000 calories a day, and with my weight, I probably burn more, it should amount to about 2,800 to 3,000 calories a day, with this 1% bonus it's practically 30 calories burned every day without doing anything! - MegMerrilies7dに返信 Iris_3086
It's 3500 calories per 1lb of fat.
Considering that a normal body burns about 2,000 calories a day, and with my weight, I probably burn more, it should amount to about 2,800 to 3,000 calories a day, with this 1% bonus it's practically 30 calories burned every day without doing anything! - MegMerrilies7dコメント
Great premise!
"I can help you reincarnate into the body of a boy who asked me for help. While your father asked me to give you a better life, the boy asked me to give his family a better life. So your job will be to make a better life for yourself, while striving to improve the life of the family that takes you in. The old man said with a serious voice. - MegMerrilies10dコメント
How dare she have boundaries!
"Jian Yufei, what's wrong with you today? Are you explosive or something? Everything I do is simply unacceptable for you, is it because I left you in the rain yesterday, are you really so petty?!" - MegMerrilies15dコメント
Ha! So true.
"Aren't they everywhere?" I calmly respond. "Don't forget when I was pursuing you, there were plenty of others chasing after me too. I just chose you." - MegMerrilies20dコメント
So many men fail to cherish the woman until she has given up on him.
"Then why didn't you cherish her? Do you know her "-Nicholas almost gave up the secret. - MegMerrilies23dコメント
Great story author, I. enjoying it a lot. A little bit of clean up is needed I'm this passage, though. You've got some repeated sentences.
"How are you feeling today? Is the dizziness better?" Jones asked some routine questions as usual. I answered him briefly, but I kept thinking back to the night when Damon threw the negatives on me and walked away. Luna didn't know how to react either. She had witnessed my humbleness in front of Damon for ten years. She always thought Damon treated me like an enemy. She stood up and said to me, "I'm going to go think." After she left, I was alone in the room, holding the negatives and sinking into deep thought. I felt like I was in a dream. Could it be that I misunderstood Damon? Could it be that he wasn't as cold and heartless as I thought? These thoughts were swirling in my mind, and I didn't know what to do. Luna was also confused. She had witnessed my humbleness in front of Damon for ten years. She always thought that Damon was treating me like an enemy. She stood up and said to me, "I'm going to think about it." I was left alone in the room, holding the negatives, immersed in my thoughts. I felt like I was in a dream. Could it be that I misunderstood Damon? Could it be that he wasn't as cold and heartless as I thought? These thoughts were swirling in my mind, and I didn't know what to do. Was it possible that everything I thought about Damon was wrong? That he wasn't as cruel and indifferent as I thought? My mind was a mess. I took a deep breath and tried to sort out my thoughts. Damon had helped me, and he did it for my sake, not for any benefit. This was a fact that I couldn't deny. But what about everything else? What about all the humiliation and indifference I had experienced? I felt like I was stuck in a maze, unable to find the exit. The more I thought about it, the more confused I became. Maybe I needed some time to figure it out. Maybe I needed to talk to Damon. Or maybe I just needed some space to clear my head. In the end, I decided to keep the negatives and wait. Wait for the right time, wait for Damon, wait for the truth. Perhaps, in the end, everything would be clear, "Think about what?" Jones asked, his hands shoved nonchalantly into the pockets of his white coat, a pair of handsome eyes visible above the face mask. His voice was slightly muffled due to the mask, but it was still utterly captivating. "Think about… what to eat later," Luna blurted out randomly before she hightailed it out of there. "You're getting a divorce?" Jones always had a knack for delivering the most shocking news in the most casual way. I froze, staring at him, "How did you know? Did Damon tell you?" He shrugged, "Yeah, he spilled the beans. It was the night you had your accident. Ariel was there too." Just a moment ago, I was feeling guilty for misunderstanding Damon. But Jones's words quickly wiped out that guilt. Damon apparently wanted the divorce too, or why else would he tell his friends? He was a man of his word. If he said he was going to divorce, then he definitely would. I bowed my head, "Yes, we're getting a divorce. I decided not to take any of his property in the divorce as a thank you for him saving me." Jones, with a hint of amusement in his voice, said, "Congrats." "Congrats on my divorce?" I glared at him, "Maybe you should save your congratulations for when I remarry." - MegMerrilies28dコメントCh 25 CHAPTER 25
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As requested, here's the rewritten text with corrected spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors: - MegMerrilies1mthコメント
weird sentence structure here
I remember looking outside wondering why Snowball wouldn't go back into her doghouse. I wandered out to see what was going on and found her with two puppies under her. I scooped them up and then picked her up (she was a large white husky) under her front legs. I think about it now, and I sweat a little. She could have bitten my face off what with her giving birth, and the weather which would have scared her. - MegMerrilies2mthコメント
Lovely word picture!
The glass doors at the front of the hospital opened wide and spewed me out into a brand-new world. - MegMerrilies2mthコメントCh 2 Was This Hell?
- MegMerrilies2mthに返信 Kaitelin
Thanks, I've never heard of it being left open. Let down, undone or loose, or untied sure.
She took a step back when he came close to her. It didn't stop him from cornering her, and her back hit the wall behind her. He raised his hand towards her face, and she closed her eyes, scared. She shuddered when his fingers trail down from her temple and her jaw and neck. Her blonde hair was left open. - MegMerrilies2mthコメントCh 5 Chapter 5 Today is the 15th
- MegMerrilies2mthコメント
I am enjoying your story immensely, author, but I am having an issue suspending reality in this scene. Any person, upon discovering they've been shot in the head or having a wound upon their head, would tend to it first with a sense of urgency. As always, your story is your own, and you may write it as you wish, but this took me out of what was a very captivating scene.
This time, he seriously inspected his temple and did not miss a single detail. - MegMerrilies3mthコメント
This is a very real phenomenon. It's cognitive dissonance produced by abuse. All too often, women excuse this over and over making themselves question what they already know.
"In the end, I only love you, Evangeline. So be a good girl, alright?" The words hit her hard. Was she a fool to want to take revenge? Was all this really normal and it was her exaggerating the accident? She felt her chest tightening but she closed her eyes and did not whisper a word. - MegMerrilies3mthコメント
One of the things I was told about introducing new characters is that they can feel abrupt to the reader. You show that they're family in this chapter. They have past history, but we've seen none of this struggle in the preceding chapters. This can be easily fixed by having her send him a letter he throws away or stews angrily over. This way, the character is not unknown to your reader.
"So you returned." she smiled with a mocking glare on her face but his stoic eyes did not flicker.