I didn't want to spend much time having him be at a young age.I appreciate the advice, though!don't worry, there's gonna be plenty of adventures!our mc will be around for a LONG time

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

I appreciate the help so much!once I reach a certain point, I would like to go back and edit the story, so these types of comments help immensely!

thank you so much!I tend to worry of under-using that I know I overuse them😅I am trying to get better every chapter and will definitely take this into consideration 💚

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

and please point out any specific words, or characters you deem I shouldn't implement in the story!

I would like to also point out, that you only have .3 hours of reading. It's a weird critique imo. I also feel you may have not read very much if you are claiming certain characters are irrelevant. either way, I appreciate the review!

I appreciate the review. every character I create has a purpose. I apologize if it's not for you!

Thank you for clarifying!

thank God this is a fictional story then

I am probably biased, due to my love of the author's other work. That being said, my own writing style is super influenced by Warmaisach. The way I enjoy other novels, is in reference to this person's work. I'll be transparent, and say that I read his first 2 books on a pirate site, I'm broke lol, but due to my love of those novels, I chose to come to the source for his newest creation, and it didn't disappoint. The world building is top-notch as always, and the writing quality has improved. I may have read older versions of his previous novels, but this one shows a huge improvement in structure, grammar, and overall quality. The originality of the world and power system is refreshing, and it's obvious, this novel is going to be huge on the site! I hope one day, my own work can do for others, what Warmaisach's has done for me! I haven't stopped recommending these novels, and I never will! Thank you for all the amazing journeys you have, and will take me on<3 Can't wait to see Gravitas and Alex! We already know what Shang is doing so you can leave that to the imagination lol.

INSANE!

this only has a few chapters, but the writing quality is great, and the world building and character building is also topnotch. Can't wait to see where the author takes it!

big ups💚

Legend of Korra is peak👌

I'm only a few chapters in but the story is very interesting and the writing is high-tier. I'm excited to see where this goes! The author is a very nice person and I wish them success

Not a lot of content, but it's well written and interesting. I hope this review helps boost your exposure! I'm also writing a novel called "Primal Gate". I would love your thoughts on it💚

thank you for the advice!

Dylan is very much a lonely guy. this is much less of a boy meets his crush situation. and more of a boy finally finds a girl that will let him cross that line

it's an "Authors/Note" I abbreviated it to A/N it's referring to my incorrect use of the word copium. it being a combination of coping and opium