Deuteros

I think you should write and upload a short novel to learn and gain experience, regardless of whether it goes well or not and if many people read it, just to improve. Personally, I like the way you write and with practice I think you could refine it well.

It's really only the second half of the first chapter that feels off.

This chapter did not have the same problem, very clean and easy to read. I think it's the conjugations of when the protagonist performs the actions in the present. I'm not sure, at the beginning of the first chapter it didn't happen either, it's when you start representing the present, it feels distant. I think it should be more direct. I'm sorry to be so ambiguous but I don't know how to explain it well.

I think it's good, but you use the "I" too much. I think it gives the narration a weird feeling. I don't know very well how to explain it in English.

I think you mean the mast, not the anchor

I'll read it tomorrow but don't expect too much from me, I'm not even close to being a writer.

i see

If I enter from my library it tells me that the book doesnt exist

Ryzen can take him as an apprentice and travel around Runeterra for a few years. That would solve the travel time problems too.

tftc