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I also don't think I'll add any visual effects, but let's agree, if you had a power and it didn't have any visual effects you would be, at the very least, a little upset.

hello, thank you very much, I didn't know how lightning is formed.

Hello, I enjoyed reading your fanfic but I have some complaints about it, first: the micro I don't know what of his Vision, this ability is simply not mentioned anymore as if out of absolute nothing it disappeared and in return he gained a super memory , also of absolute nothingness. Second: you're going too fast, slow down a little and take advantage of each conflict to develop the character, your prey ended up creating some forced scenarios, for example his cooperation with the army, it doesn't make sense for him to be able to meet someone of such a high level of the army by simply saying "I want more" instead you could make him sell the items through normal means, and because the amount and quantity of resources end up catching her attention, this sounds much more natural than the previous example, third: for At least for me, the protagonist should be more aware of super creatures, they are unstoppable, uncontrollable, fickle and unpredictable beasts, so due to Han's absence, some butterfly effect could happen and make a super creature attack his shelter while he is there, so it would do a lot It makes more sense for him to maximize his Sacred genes first so he doesn't end up dying if he encounters one of these creatures. My recommendation is that you take a break for a few weeks to rewrite the story, taking advantage of the fact that you now have better writing experience. I hope this comment can help you continually improve.

I certainly will, I dedicate at least 1 hour a day of my time to writing, note: although the performance of chapter 30 did not satisfy me

Yes, this fanfic is not mine, at least not until chapter 26, after that it will be my own, so it would be from chapter 27 and beyond, my goal with this is to finish this fanfic that had incredible potential

hello, thank you very much, but I think that the person who should have such praise is the original author of the fanfic, as I already explained, the first 26 chapters are not mine, but I was really grateful that someone else also liked it

Good morning my name is lucas I have a novel audio channel and I'm asking to be able to post videos about your novel so as not to cause problems here is the video link: https://youtu.be/f1IUTEifwEg