webnovel
0
Locke581

Locke581

Lv1

Avid reader and listener of interesting things 😄

2023-06-04 入りたしたGlobal
-h

読曞の

48

本を読む

瞬間
9
  • Locke581
    Locke5819 months ago
    発衚

    Dude are you a 15 year old Virgin or what? Why are you continually butchering your own novel. If I was pointing an Uzi at you are you going to use a club instead of the rocket launcher on your back. Well that's what you're doing with your MC. You're ruining a perfectly good idea and theme for what plot holes. As OCD as you are about your flavor text you drop the ball for everything else. Maybe you should stop writing novels and go to work for enix and write flavor text for their video games.

  • Locke581
    Locke5819 months ago
    発衚

    Bro you've just about fucked this novel up you started out strong as hell had me hooked but around chapter 130 you started holding it back and using ability flavor text repeatedly as filler hell I can recite his abilities in my sleep WTF

  • Locke581
    Locke5819 months ago
    に返信 stonemetal

    It's trash MC starts out strong but even before chapter 100 he's turned damn near ful simp I can't even read it anymore for getting pissed off it's like being trolled by a 15yr old Virgin.

  • Locke581
    Locke5819 months ago
    発衚

    Please explain to me WTF is up with all the writers and the creation of dipshit MCs it started out pretty good effectively taking out the hunters chasing crystal but now he's acting like a squeamish pansy ignorant of his succubis thought and trailing behind Monica like a whipped dog in heat WTF.

  • Locke581
    Locke5819 months ago
    発衚

    The 500s are a little disappointing him and the girls continually being separated and being closed off from his domain and the tattoo not working kinda makes it useless just saying

  • Locke581
    Locke5819 months ago
    発衚

    Not bad but definitely not the best. Great idea though as a suggestion I would recommend you read Duel cultivation return of the god of pleasure to gain some ideas on what is lacking not saying it's the best but it will definitely give you some insight that could be a plus for you and your novels progression. Still your story is pretty good the idea is excellent any read the recommendation and you'll understand what I'm saying. Thank you and good luck 🀞

  • Locke581
    Locke5819 months ago
    発衚

    Truly one of if not the best of it's kind. You my author do a beautiful job of creating an entrancing world and an epic protagonist. As an avid reader of novels and an avid listener of audiobooks yours has kept me enthralled my only regret is that there's not 5000 chapters to beng read. Keep it up 👍👍💯

  • Locke581
    Locke58110 months ago
    発衚

    I would love to say I'm excited but with this authors propensity for never completing his work I figure it will end up like the rest unfinished which is unfortunate at least finish the other one or complete something sheesh.

  • Locke581
    Locke5812 years ago
    コメント

    Dear author I really like your novel aside from the fact that you use the same mc profile of everyone else and stop punctuating the sexual stuff the audio spells it out literally. Also you should fire your editor and proof reader. I'm already irritated at how characters are refered to as the yohan or the diya or the alena. Have more respect for your work.