You have good intuitions

he's very delusional, a perfect mentor for Hope. let's see how far his brain lead him

The true Dora, you'll understand in future chapters (aka 120-184)

yeah👍

two people told me the mc wasn't op on discord, look the current trending, good books nowadays must have op mc beating everything from the beginning

We never know what was on the plan of the author, I too am a reader so as a writer I know what I want and what I'm tired to see. I know where this story is going and I have no intention to write another cliche here to milk the story over thousand chapters.

If you think it was good you should trust the author in what he's doing.

I see

I understand, I'll change that then, thanks

don't know what is legion but ok

I'm reediting the chapters to make it more understandable, sorry for the inconvenience

Dora 11 years old

bet

many things happens in the shadow

everyone can be hated until you know them well

The characters know each other already so they don't need to explain everything but i admit that it was a bad idea for readers. I suggest you check the technical sheets, most of the world building is there for new readers and I can answer if you have more questions

The rest is too long to detail and probably pointless now, but I'll follow directly with the second phase in a few days, hopefully 10 chapters before Monday. The new book will show you more what I tried to do here and the lore, and it will correct the mistakes I made before in many ways. hope to see you there too and make something that you will appreciate

i understand, the point you mentioned are correct, the point of the betrayal was that the one in control wasn't Dora but the sin, so erasing his memory the first time was wise, as for the second it was planned but when the mother will come this Dora would refuse. The story from this point will never be back to them together, the idea was that they would use him and he would awake in two side, one who would learn yo be the true Dora in a parallel world and the second who would turn against everyone after chapter 183 and everyone he killed would be revive in a sort of heaven where the good Dora is with Midgard and Elizabeth (reverberating to the evil Dora in making him believe that if he kill everyone he will save the world)

thank you, you can read it whenever you feel like it and have another opinion. just warning you that it won't be a sweet delightful walk in the park, it's made to be very dark until one specific chapter and it's the biggest downside I'm facing with feedback. this book is the phase 1 of another book but now that i'm aware of this problem I'm I'm currently working on phase 2 first so really take your time.

thank you for your review, your experience through this story made me realize that my approach was problematic for what I was planning. the true plot of the book was for the mc to find who he really is, the thing about a true Dora and it begins from chapter 183 but I have to admit that it's probably too long. indeed the mc is meant to be antagonizing and turn against everyone while his true self will discover who he was and help everyone to stop him. I have no trouble spoiling it now because now i understand my flaws, the story is too complicated, thank you for making me understand that.