MangaisLife1

Blizzard54k/Author just wanted to say your novel is amazing and one of the best on webnovel ! I mean its hard to come by novels like this. I had some suggestions since I read a lot of novels with systems and hope you can take a look. I mean initially I was annoyed by MC and how he doubted the system (supreme mage) but then the twist made it better. Also I was annoyed because his battle senses suck and then we realize how previous supreme mage sabotaged and made him weaker and now he is growing on his own which is better. So you fixed that and removed that crutch how he always relied on system Also another thing which wasnt mentioned much was lifespan since I was hoping higher realms could get you immortality for him and harem. I mean you made system better since system said this is lower realm which means he could eventually go to higher realm world, and there is even more you can write outside of forsaken continent since he is not even strong enough to leave forsaken continent. Then when he is too powerful for this world he could go to higher realm but since this is low realm he is in he can go to middle realm or something and then after gets stronger and explore more with harem. Also this is more magic but a lot of concepts seem like cultivation like physiques etc I wonder if you will change from mana to QI since I am assuming nascent energy is higher level energy and QI is higher level energy then mana. But then usually mana veins and qi veins are different so you would have to revamp everything or somehow system helps him and his harem change Also awesome thing is how system will open harem options and with that hopefully he can help them more. Maybe the harem members can telepathically communicate with all members of harem and him like a group chat. Some systems allow that and he can share more nascent energy and help them progress faster. Also hopefully his bloodline can help them grow stronger through interactions with him and speed up their growth as well. Also system could eventually when he is ready to leave realm or somewhere along the way give him inner world where harem members or his group of people can be. It could be a whole world or small world which can grow where there is time dilation so 1 day outside could be 30 days inside or etc. Also this allows them to train and for him to take his group of people to middle level world when he grows strong for this plane Also alot of the harems issues could be solved with getting them a higher tier cultivation technique etc which speeds up gathering mana or qi Also a lot of systems allow for purchasing bloodlines for harem members so he could even do that or maybe his bloodline has multiple powers and he can bestow whatever part of his bloodline matches them the most etc I also hope you can make the harem not empty vases since there are a lot of members being added left and right which can make them useless in long term and lower quality of writing I mean it would be better he doesnt just start picking up everyone he comes in contact with and focus on making his current harem stronger. Also now taking only stronger mages only 4 5 of 6 star not normal people or lower otherwise I mean most harem members will become pointless and useless since they are too weak too help. I mean hopefully with upgraded to system he can increase their realms faster since they get more nascent energy then before.

Dont waste your time. Story had a potential to be a good 4.5 but...Primordial Dual Cultivator is similar and much better. Let me tell you why: 1. MC transmigrates at 20 as a kid. Past life was mortal till 20 so its absolutely ridiculous to make such a weak idiotic mc. I mean he acts like a child ever since transmigration? He blushes at being teased etc and when in the past he was older, had responsibility of taking care of his sister and mom. It makes no sense why you are acting like a beta idiotic mc. He used to earn money give and know about responsibilties etc. It shows he is experienced, grown up and he said when he was reborn he would live a life for himself and his goals. He likes mom aunt etc but instead denies and acts like an idiot. Blushes gets embarrassed and runs away ....I mean what kind of weak minded BS is this? 2. After 17 or so chapters it is mentioned he acts like a child because his body and soul is adjusting etc. But that doesnt make any sense either since he can access his memories from past life and your memories do affect your emotions and body physiologically. So why didnt author just mention that he noticed he is impulsive and he cant control his emotions, blushes at being slightly teased etc. Atleast we would be like why is he acting so beta or you know those mc who get nosebleeds or bs like that. So you are telling me his 20 years of memories are overpowered by a child body and the hormones because his underdeveloped brain is so strong he cant handle a conversation. Now if you are saying his hormones and child body is impulsive due to his underdeveloped brain etc then I get it eventhough there was no point in doing that since all you did was make the MC more annoying and beta for 17 chapters. I mean even if thats what author are going for then you should have mentioned that he noticed how he was more impulsive early on instead of making him so annoying and irritating. He was 20 before and with the new experience he is 27 or so and its absolutely ridiculous to make such a weak idiotic mc. I mean he acts like a child ever since transmigration? when in the past he was older and had responsibility of taking care of his sister and mom. Earning money etc shows he is experienced and grown up and he said when he was reborn he would live a life for himself and his goals and he likes mom aunt etc but instead denies and acts like an idiot. Blushes gets embarrassed and runs away ....I mean what kind of weak minded BS is this? or when he says hmph or whines when his mother tells him she cant tell him about cultivation and its secrets until he is old enough. I mean you dont have patience etc and he keeps asking and whining about it....I like the story but you literally are ruining it due to beta MC . The primordial dual cultivator has similar setup with mom and sister after transmigration but MC isnt a beta like this and much better. He can take initiative and go for what he wants. Here it feels like the system forcing him, or his mom forcing him to be with girls or make a harem because he is to beta to take initiative or say what he wants. I mean as MC if you cant even have a mindset to take action yourself it seems stupid. If he can ask for food or knowledge about cultivation etc he can do more. I mean the fact that even his internal monologue author didnt show he wants mom or aunt etc...He did say it once but covered it up with no thats my mom I cant or some bs beta BS. So if even internally early on author showed he has desired and wants that kind of relationship just his current body is making him act like a beta then alright but nowhere does it show him wanting to take action or be assertive with what he wants. 3.So even his internal thoughts at 27 year old (by the time he is 7 in this world) are not grown up. He got the most op system and he is arguing with a system that why dont you have infinite space or etc when he got one of the strongest systems with insane abilities. I mean you expect someone with such a weak childish mindset character to be a strongest cultivator. He is constantly cursing at the system when he is the one who asks stupid questions and system calls him out for it. I mean he is 27 but throwing tantrums 4. He gets a technique from the system one of the most powerful techniques in existence and when he asks the system compare it to the strongest technique in this world his mom gave the system says that other backwater technique is trash. So now most logical people 27 year old would at this point (he has already told mom about his past ) would think hey let me make my mom use this technique too. I mean she would have to recultivate from start or even some techniques allow you to change it but he doesnt even think about that at all. Also he tells his aunts as well about his past. The 2 aunts and mom live together with him and he has met no one else ever, so logically first if you ask is there anyone targeting us? and if they are secluded and dont have any danger then first he should get his mom to cultivate the technique and improve her foundation, then when she is strong enough at the aunts level get them now to cultivate. That way in meantime atleast they have someone with some strength incase something happens or if they are totally safe like she has separate hidden realm then they can just all 3 recultivate. Now reason being your foundation is what cultivation is built on and obviously they cant compete with that technique. Now yes author can say in future he could probably improve their foundation with dual cultivation, or treasures etc but fact that he hasnt even asked system is stupid. 5. There is too much useless conversation and teasing like why did you hug him, or when he hugs one the mom saying you dont love me as much or forgot about me BS. I mean come on he is 27 at this point and she is older then that. This interaction 36 chapters in and happens over and over that you get sick of it.

You mean MC is a beta idiot who cannot even handle what he wants despite now being 27 years old almost

Author I like it so far but only thing which is annoying is making him seem like beta male who just blush or cant handle talking to women or interacting. I mean he cant even take initiative as a freaking 20 year old...I mean the fact that the mom has to sorta tell him to get a harem etc instead of him actively pursuing his mom aunts etc ..he seems too passive compared to similar stories I have read where MC is more assertive with what he wants....I hope this improves otherwise a passive mc who has nothing so far but read and blush and get shy is stupid

The mom aunt and kitsune are in the harem righttttt?? It has to beee

STUPID...So players on day one are spending $100,000-$300,000 for items common items i mean that makes no sense....the numbers are just absurd in this game and its pretty stupid

AUTHORRR this is absolutely amazing ! Masterpiece. I mean majority of novels I read out of 100 maybe 5 are a 4 or higher but this is great Initially I was a little annoyed where MC was going to give people ability to cultivate because why give them power like that but then with slave contracts and giving them a lower version of mana based not qi based I had no problems I mean MC is smart, there is some chill comedy and also the whole dual worlds with MC and FMC makes it fun and interesting. They are both working hard in their own respective world and helping each other grow. I mean this is truly awesome and enjoyable to see them building something together All I ask is to write 10,000+ chapters thank youuuu

LMAO reading your review made me angry at the mc and not waste my time reading this- Check

Sounds like SIMP ! I mean that does make no sense and I guess I wont be wasting my time. I mean if he has made some connection between them and was part of harem and trustworthy I would get it but seems like he did it way early on, when he didnt even need to since he could earn way more and it could backfire since he didnt even know what she would do..an idiot for sure

MC is like a steroid addled, LOW IQ musclehead.... I mean initially I found it funny like a trolling novel or comedy but I mean come on...All the mc thinks about is being strong, getting stronger etc...I mean he is practically 2 years old in the new life and and he is thinking he is about to go take down actual dragons. He is also not adapting because everytime he gains strength he starts crashing into a wall or mountain. Then he proceeds to beat up the wall or mountain for "attacking" him and after destroying it says some BS like guess you couldnt even handle this or see what you made me do....I mean this is idiotic. Also every few chapters we are told he looks really good in almost the same exact way and dialogue...too boring and stupid