Voryn987

Could he not manipulate the space in his wounds? If I were him i would simply manipulate the space inside the wound and the surface level space of the wound. This way, he was attacked but loses no blood and only has pain to deal with. Also, why is this the first time we actually see him use the system? Not gonna lie, i forgot entirely that this was a system novel until this point.

The original author probably changed all instances of kill to eat in order to bypass chinese censoring

Because this is 2 hours before his reincarnation, it is in the past. Therefore, past tense should be stuck to. I would change this line to be, "Marvin said as he stared blankly at me."

Pretty semantic but meh. Could be changed, to flow better, into: "Kevin, I assume that you know your wrong, right?"

I started recreating the last seen i saw of earth --> I started recreating the last scene i saw of earth seen and scene are homophones. Homophone are words that sound the same but have different meanings. 'Seen' means that you saw something (also past tense), and 'Scene' is a particular section of a show, manga, etc. Example: He was last seen running from the police. The fight scene from JOJO with Yoshikage Kira was epic

Idk if i dont understand, but, does this mean the full complete work is on patreon if we dont want to wait for new chapters? Does this mean over time you'll port chapters over till its done?

Take note, boys. This right here is useful advice

This is a stolen story, and the "author" stole from Y1Fellas on fanfiction.net. Please support the real creator https://www.fanfiction.net/s/14191647/1/Count-of-Serenno

This is a stolen story, and the "author" stole from Y1Fellas on fanfiction.net. Please support the real creator https://www.fanfiction.net/s/14191647/1/Count-of-Serenno