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Good catch! I had meant to edit that section since his age fluctuated a bit during early writing. He is, in fact, not too young.
Traveler's Will is very solidly written, especially once the chapters reach the 20s and over. The author's sense of pace is very deliberate with the details, and really makes you feel the situation in a granular sense. The main character, Asdras, is strongly crafted, and while there is a System, it's not front-and-center in a way that interferes with the enjoyment. (Though that does make it a little harder to wrap one's head around). There are a few word use issues that are more obtuse than incorrect, and narratively I did find the MC gets his hand held by the plot somewhat, with other characters pushing him along a lot at times. But overall it's a solid read and quite enjoyable! Definitely good potential.
I think I get the context, but maybe "wishful thinking" instead of the word "denial" would work more clearly.
Awaken, you mean?
As in Previous or Final?
Two chapters out as of this reading. I can tell the author has a good sense of prose and narrative pacing. The technical side of this is good and has few errors. The reading is slightly inhibited by symbol use, but that is more an aspect of WN not providing basic tools like italics and bolding to new writers. That can be corrected in time. Overall, a decent start.
Try to be consistent when indicating italics. You used * in the previous chapter, and that's better because people who use autoreaders will have the reader read out the _ but not a *. Once you contract, you'll have access to actual italics via CTRL I