LarkayBimmy2

The first chapter is an absolute hooker, from the vivid descriptions to the excellent use of dialogue. From the 10 chapters I've read, I can say that this novel is criminally lacking in views. Every chapter is bite sized, yet filled with passion and care. A genuinely good book with great potential.

I'll write more, I'll put out more of my ideas. Thank you so much for the critique, I needed it.

It's painful to hear that, but yes, thank you for being honest with the critique. I'll update chapter 1 and 2 to show the beginnings of a story.

Yeah, expected that. Thanks for the review, though.

Hello to my potential readers. I'll post once a week, but it'll take about 5 months worth of chapters before any action really starts. I'll just try to intrigue people with WORLD BUILDING for those that like slow burning novels.