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Prasen_Syndrome1yrコメントbeen *on a date (and moreover) must not be used together.
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*3 person
On my way, I thought why there was a 3 people room system because I didn't want any roommates or stuff like that but I just accepted it regardless. Slithering my arm in my hair and seeing how it has already started growing again made my arms itch because it was a fresh cut I expected to stay in shape for at least a week but it seems like that isn't the case. - Prasen_Syndrome1yrコメント
*weird
It could hardly be called a train with how stretchy it was, and the weirder fact is you can't even feel any change in the train thanks to chunks of metal covering it. Yes, you get those occasional shakes but other than that it is pretty smooth and chill. - Prasen_Syndrome1yrコメント
*laid on one of the chapter was good
I laid down in one of the 5 seats like it was a bed, dropping my phone in my head while I was trying to find a movie. - Prasen_Syndrome1yrコメント
comma after down
I dropped my hands down my eyes starting to shine, what have I done? Even though I had no idea what was wrong I realized it was something that happened because of me. - Prasen_Syndrome1yrコメント
your writinng really improved, you are making proper use of puntuation
It was almost like a new rock was being added each time, Ren's father always comes back late even though he's extremely loyal to my mom. Because thanks to his work he has a lot of trips but since the pay is good he can't say no. - Prasen_Syndrome1yrコメント
a comma must be plalced after complicated
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again too long sentence with a lot of thing going on. try to break it in 2 sentence.
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away from home is not necessary , it can be omitted
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the sentence is too long. generally readers might get confused. so try to brea it into 2 or 3 sentences.
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Ch 1462 Eternal Glory (END)