Charming_liar
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The story is good in itself, the pacing is okay though the descriptions could use some work, like the characters and also their environment like when Kalla was transported or transmigrated the first time. Also just an advice but for character description just write defined cheekbones, jawline and something about their eyes
This is how I picture him, this is his mercenary outfit.
Well overall the story is good, the author switches from povs even in the beginning you can see the switch of povs. Also the one thing am sure that the author would deliver to the reader is chapter length. Reader's won't have to worry about short chapters. Also the author also shows changes in the background, like they show the exact place the event is taking place. Well I should stop there if I keep on I might spoil it.
The novel's amazing even though the names are causing me troubles when it comes to memorizing them but I don't mind. Unlike the majority of the books here on webnovel this is an original and it's creativity it's amazing from descriptions to development to the dialogues. It's an amazing novel leaving you wanting more
Well apart from some grammar mistakes and the author forgetting to edit something I commented it's a good story leaving you wanting more
Uhm I think the word you were looking for was tick to 11
The first two are okay but the last one was unnecessary
Like here you've repeated the words ,the words wouldn't change three times
Come on throw your Mc a bone.