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Sorry but I'm discontinuing this book. Doesn't get any reads but thanks. Wrote it so far thanks to you
Well some paragraphs are a little bit long, as I've been told a bunch of times that it sorta discourages readers. Other than that I'd say good job the pacing of the story is fast enough also I like how you aren't stingy with the descriptions it feels like you are really in the story.
Yeah you're not the only one. I'll try to break the paragraphs
The story is good in itself, the pacing is okay though the descriptions could use some work, like the characters and also their environment like when Kalla was transported or transmigrated the first time. Also just an advice but for character description just write defined cheekbones, jawline and something about their eyes
I'm pretty confident about my story my characters also I'm also a little descriptive which can be good and bad that being said my only problem is my updating stability but I'll try to work on it. So hope you enjoy this book
For a new book it really has great potential. The romance, the mystery and the author is not stingy with the descriptions. It's a really good book and it'll deserves the praise.
This is how I picture him, this is his mercenary outfit.
Well this is my first book and to be honest I'm kinda having fun with it and am giving myself a good review cause if I don't like my own book then I shouldn't expect others to like it too.
Thanks for reading it
By the way. Thanks you were the first person to send me a power vote so it means a lot