TimTere

This Naruto fanfic is pretty cool. I’m glad to see another eye getting some love besides the Sharingan, which is rare in most Naruto fanfics. The editing and translation could definitely use some work, though—I've noticed some character names are misspelled or change from one paragraph to the next (not a huge deal if you just go with it). But honestly, I can’t keep reading because the story hasn’t really progressed since the first chapter. I’ve made it through over 200 chapters, and it feels like not much has happened compared to other Naruto fics I’ve checked out. If you’re okay with that, then go for it—I really do think it’s a solid story.

I’m loving the novel so far, but as with dragon monarch systems most recent chapters I feel the description of some things is overdone leading some chapters being majorly dedicated to just describing something. Which is ok so we can clearly picture it even though we’re not there, but I feel it slows down the development of the story itself.

I love the story and development but the newer chapters have been using this ridiculous stiff language thats hard to follow and hard to understand. The wordage used in the earlier chapters is not only easier to understand but flows easier so if possible I hope it’s changed back.