Johnathon_Magus

Yeah the story is about some guy who is named Lusi Santos GTA anyone? Anyway the story get’s stupid even the author admiting he uses this just to vent. It’s more like a parody than an actual story. Like a college kid’s wet dream and nihilist view’s bemoaning life itself. MC is trash,scumbag,and a manipulator. So if your hoping for a romance which is founded on truth. Nothing here but lies so yeah. So many girl’s added like Pokemon with no real development. Author tends to forget them. Updating stability abysmal. World development either too vauge or just info dump’s. Alway’s been show don’t tell author does not succeed on that front. If your expecting any tension or seriousness in the story this ain’t the place. Powerscaling is a joke. Basically it’s a parody that makes fun of itself and everything around it. The MC complain’s every moment of the story like bruh just shut up it’s so annoying. Multiple POV’s can work at time’s while it also fall’s flat. Character’s are either one dimensional or complex but don’t show up again. Overall too many character’s set up with no context. If there is it’s too much and we never explore MC background like my guy where are the flashback’s? It’s just mentioned that is all. Don’t tell me just show me! You see too many situations like that. So much 4th wall breaking to point the author is just talking. Overall a waste of time better spent elsewhere on a story with actual focus. I can sum up this story in one word in chaos just take out the fun. Nonsensical in the parody genere. Welp hope this helped anyone peace.

Alright I’m done this is just too stupid and meta. You should get the parody tag.

This guy can’t stop venting.

When the story becomes too meta and the story is a joke.