Kaila_Nunez

The only reason this has my power stone is because I gave it upon request.

Upon re-reading, I'd like to correct my previous thought. This story's writing is incomprehensible. There are no cohesive paragraphs, there are tone issues, the writing is describing things that don't seem to relate and is info-dumping original ideas that are never explained to the audience. Many sentences don't make sense at all. I'm surprised I was able to get 5 "paragraphs" in. I wish I could edit my ranking of this story.

From what I read, this story is fine. The writing can be a little too conversational rather than literary, but some of the descriptions are interesting. However, some of them I found to be needlessly overcomplicated to the point where it becomes hard to follow and less compelling without re-reading. The world building of this story is good, I feel like I would enjoy this more if the writing was more straightforward and unpretentious.

This story's premise is pretty interesting! The idea of choosing when and where you reincarnate and what you become is cool! The only gripe I have is that the writing sometimes seems more like the format of roleplay/LARPing than the format of novel writing. I would also suggest to have this proofread. Cool story~

The premise to this story is very interesting! The idea of having to die over and over again against your will is chilling but intriguing. I want to find out what happens next. The only suggestion I would make is to pay attention to the use of repetition. There are a lot of "I mean" and "Now," and so on that make the story seem repetitive. Perhaps maybe there could be some light of hope or at least comic relief to lighten the story a bit? But other than that, it's a good read.

Woah what a great hook!

Great opening sentence!