Craig_morrison

Great shot at a monstrous MC, just don’t forget to add more to it often. People will truly forget about it if there isn’t much for them to work with when reading into a story.

Needs more chapters, that’s all this needs. I don’t know if I’ll return for this though, short stories involving fanfiction are usually never updated in my experience.

Needs more chapters for a full five star review, that’s it. Your very dedicated and creative. Just avoid making grammar mistakes in order to get that five stars you will definitely get from your readers.