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REOPHA

REOPHA

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2022-05-25 入りましたUnited States
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  • REOPHA
    REOPHA2yr
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    There might be a typo here, I think you might've wanted to type 'and' instead of 'a' but I'm not sure.

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    Black Exodia
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  • REOPHA
    REOPHA2yr
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    Really liked this chapter and I really like the power system in this. It was beginning to feel a bit slow for me after the 3rd chapter but after reading this I'm getting back into it again!

    Ch 9 Exodia 9: The Key
    Black Exodia
    都市 · VoidEX
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  • REOPHA
    REOPHA2yr
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    you could replace hanged with hung

    After the AST lesson ended, the four of us hanged out for a small time and went our separate ways.
    Black Exodia
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  • REOPHA
    REOPHA2yr
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    I really like the story concept of this! There is a few things that I didn't really like about the writing, it's nothing big, there's just some words that can be taken out of a sentence, but other than that I like the story and I like the writing so far! Keep it up man.

    Ch 1 Exodia 1: Schrödinger's Cat
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    都市 · VoidEX
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