Uni_Desires

Loving the story so far, keep it up.

Honestly, it’s an OKAY translation. There are occasions (last 9 or so chapters) that have the occasional Chinese name. Which is annoying. Other than that, the translator should probably triple check and actually edit the translations if they know English well. Just so it flows better. Other than those bits and translation errors it’s not a bad read.

Three horsemen of the apocalypse? I mean that war simulator was called ‘apocalypse’ and there is 3 of the humans that survived

Not sure if it’s the same one but there is a translation in one piece with the same concept. I think it was Indian though. It’s called ‘One Piece: Kingdom Building System’.

I’m not even sure what I just read, but whoever created this should be put in jail. You might be thinking like I was going into this, “Oh a fanfiction where the mc is reborn as kaido’s son, that might be good!” Spoiler, it wasn’t. The first paragraph of the first chapter is LITERALLY A KISSING SCENE BETWEEN YAMATO AND THE MC AT LIKE 5. What in the actual fuck. The author should definitely be on a watchlist at the bare minimum. Read at your own risk!

Not a bad ATLA fanfiction tbh. Most atla FF tend to gravitate towards joining the avatar on his quest, few actually take place from the perspective of a member of the fire nation. MC definitely has some crazy issues but there isn’t really anything to critique about the work. I recommend it.

First off, writing quality is really bad. The sentences do not flow very well grammatically aswell as it seems more like the author writing is either using a really bad translator, or English isn’t their main language Second, while the story development is sort of okay, the overall attitude of the MC is not something that could be possible in a character that was trained by a the pirate kings right hand, Rayleigh. The character would seem to have the gentle attitude you’d expect from one of the 4 blues, not the grandline. I won’t deny the idea of the fanfiction is good, I mean Yorichii is the goat, but the way the author tells it is not at a quality most readers can bear to read. Tips for author: improve the grammar of you’re writing, structure the story to make better sense and include that in the attitude for the MC. That’s pretty much all I have to say, good luck! [img=recommend]

Really like this book. Not only is it one of the few GOOD female oc fanfictions, but it’s also wholesome which I personally like along with a dash of dominance over the characters from the anime. The one complaint I have is that this hasn’t been updated in a while. I would personally LOVE for this fanfic to continue being updated by the author so if you’re reading this please I [img=update]

Shameless author 5 star review incoming!