GinMonroe

I added the edited version to this story just now.

the monster's in the fifth one comes in part 2, 3, and 4. So stay tuned.

the story is good. You have minor grammar errors, and it is easy to fix. the world you created is quite different, which makes it good and unique. keep up the hard work, and I'm looking forward to more.

the story Lost at Sea will be more than one chapter, I'm not sure how many chapters it'll be just yet, but it will definitely be more than two chapters.

This is amazing. You wrote this story beautifully. It broke my heart when a kid died though. I love this story. The way you described things were really good too. Keep up the hard work

Your did an amazing job writing this story. You added some real good descriptions, love it. This made me want to read more. Keep up the hard work.

wow, that's a huge compliment tysm! I Def will keep them coming

ty!!

first things first, you don't need to say Chens whole name every time. We know he is Chen Peng. 2nd, you you don't need to put ! after a sentence, just describe everything so we can feel how Chen feels or feel how the narrator is telling the story. space out your paragraphs so we know you're moving on to a different scene, like when you were talking about Chen and this old man in prison, then you did a flash back. those paragraphs should be spaced apart, and if you're doing a flashback, it should start like this... Flashbackthen this is where you show us the flashback. story is good but can be better.

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