Luizz_Ricardo

Author, the idea of ​​your fanfic is good, but the grammar and writing is very bad, there are many mistakes, it's hard to read, the dialogues also need to be better worked on. Now, what does the protagonist look like? So far, you haven't even written his appearance, for the love of God, how sloppy.

Author, the idea of ​​your fanfic is good, but the grammar and writing is very bad, there are many mistakes, it's hard to read, the dialogues also need to be better worked on. Now, what does the protagonist look like? So far, you haven't even written his appearance, for the love of God, how sloppy.

Author, the idea of ​​your fanfic is good, but the grammar and writing is very bad, there are many mistakes, it's hard to read, the dialogues also need to be better worked on. Now, what does the protagonist look like? So far, you haven't even written his appearance, for the love of God, how sloppy.

I'm going to give it 5 stars because I love Naruto and I think your writing is very good, the grammar has no flaws, the problem with the fanfic is its repetition of dialogues and thoughts, the rhythm is very slow and boring, this story arc where Naruto goes to cities and towns to heal people is very boring.

time skips, and it's boring to watch him as a child for a long time, it's time for him to become a teenager

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I will write without malice, many mistakes in the writing, the chapters also look like a diary, without any emotions, it lacks details and more emotion in the writing to be good, if you try to improve I will continue supporting your fanfic

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I was reading two Haikyuu fanfics, and this one is far superior, writing, story, comedy, this fanfic has the same energy as the original work, the other one I'm reading was like a diary, it was all summarizing without details and boring, I'll give it 5 stars with pleasure