Daoist0Reaper

the story is too fast-paced not well structured i get your thoughts and idea and am impressed but their execution is not done properly when one is writing something he want the reader to immerse themselves in that character and there are many points which is not done properly like training it said he trained for some time(don't remember exactly) what was the suna development then then he planted the adam tree then what you just planted and left he extracted gold and used it for suna economy how like what he improved other than daimiyo backing he captured 1 tail brought it back and left it main point focus on world building

man can you tell me the name of the raw while this is good and I appreciate your translation efforts there are still many thing which need correction such as names his grandfather and parents name specially then the incident of nine tail you should mention it like in the future where they see rather than the period of 7 years after 9 tail which made them learn and best of luck

seems google translated due to no of error

not read it yet but appreciate the effort will provide a review after reading depending on the quality

how did jiraya experience war when it is time for 2nd world war according to mc and minato age 🤔

how are you able to post these

you can shift the stats panel at end of the chap as it will allow us to know his progress as well lead to smoother reading

how did he redeem the thunder fruit its 155000 or is there any typo

why is the previous one (old) killer bee not dead

wasn't 8 tail sealed in killer B before 3rd war when he was a child as we could see from their fight with minato and as he was the new jinchuriki the previous one should be dead