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You might as well have him adopted by the Todorokis, seeing as he's so invested in other people's family affairs.

You've piqued my interest. Who is it?

I've been meaning to ask this for some time now, but why are the characters in your fanfics so hórny? This is a genuine question out of curiosity, not to offend you or anything. It just feels weird reading the hórny dialogues the characters themselves usually don't say. Anyway, I rate this 5 stars but I give 1 star to break the review bot spam. Thank you for the free entertainment.

Kind of contradictive going by him being raised by the hero that taught All Might, not showing hints of psychopathy in the earlier chapters and his childhood, and being capable of teasing and interactions with other characters, I don't see why the Main Character who is aspiring as a hero, training to he a hero, kill someone just because he wants to impress a deranged killer. Also, wasn't he a victim of bullying, that's why he did a school of shooting? Why TF would he murder a girl when that girl is being killed by a blood sucking killer who is worse than a bully? This is a completely useless chapter that basically trashes the present lighthearted tone and the Main Character's development. As things go I don't think I will like the development of the MC so I will leave. I hope you can be consistent and manage the tone shift in your future chapters.

Woman died before I could even blink. What was even the point in killing her? Where you hoping for a reaction or just wanted the MC to be an edgy vigilante?

Pointless drama. He could've just said Fate wanted to teach him because of his potential.

This is getting kinda boring. Shouldn't you finish the Young Justice Arc, or maybe his System Upgrades before doing side quests like these? It feels like filler.

I've noticed this before but why are your dialogues so weird? They give too much information as if the author(you) is controlling them to describe something(MC'S Handsome look, aura, yadayada). I suggest you read the dialogues again and because I don't see characters talking like that unless their in a play. Plus its

You've kinda ruined the first arc tbh. If you didn't give him so many perks, the level of immersion in Hunger Games could've been felt, but since he's basically Captain America with all buffs and technical knowledge most readers don't know of, the immersion was ruined and the first world basically became his playground without any tension. You should've given him the abilities after winning, maybe even some romance with Glimmer that would ultimately end in her death plus some drama or something, but no, you pushed in the cliche System at the start. Wasted potential, you have good writing but your planning is wack. Don't assume readers know what you are talking about, explain the powers to them slowly not info dumps with 10% actual plot. It's rare to have a Hunger Games Ff nowaday. Anyway, the novel isn't for me, but I wish you luck in your future works. You have a unique immersive writing but you can't capture realism in it's essence. I hope you continue to improve.

Bruh, don't tell me this is like those Japanese mangas "I became a God, but I want to live an ordinary life" bs. Why does he even want to work for them? ??