David_Arenas

There isn't plot load, and the creature (God) doesn't appear for the moment.

I know Chapter 1 may give a concrete impression, but it's only to introduce the character's origin, and it's the one that's least altered from the original. Subsequent chapters are more elaborate and closer to canon. I'd like you to give it another try with chapter 2 before making a final decision. It's your decision whether you do it or not though.

It was a pretty lame fight description. You didn't say nearly anything about the fight.

The story is well-crafted, and the plot development is great. It's truly what most fans would have wanted to see in an alternate timeline <A kind-hearted man who improves the world, prevents characters from dying, and romances a harem>. For constructive criticism, the "author" doesn't pay attention to the comments, and makes some mistakes in certain sections of his writing that he's unwilling to correct. I suppose it's because he doesn't want to work on it because he's not the original writer. Still, it's a great story, and could very well be in the Top 3 best Akame Ga Kill fanfics (just my personal opinion).

It was on the verge of evolving, but it was a still just a Special Class.

He didn't name Koro, Seryu did.

It was a Special-Class Danger Beast.

and the Assassination Unit.

<In this form, its roar alone was powerful enough to stun opponents. > You forgot this part.

You have to correct th bold part.