Overall, it's a 5 star imo, the worldbuilding is nice and the first chapter sets a tone for the rest of the story, the characters are fleshed out and have their own personalities, the only problem I had was the grammar which can be easily fixed

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I didn't know that, I was focused on getting the point across,my bad

an on point and concise review

no problem my comrade

overall, the concept is amazing, the world building the character development, they are all high points of the story, I'll give you three tips, 1 is the make sure the sentences aren't too long, spellcheck and update more, other than that, this is a pretty solid book

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creative naming

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you should try to avoid long sentences

so far, the world building, and the writing quality is good, just don't forget to go over the grammatical errors

I centered it on mobile, but on monitor its on the side idk what to do

I will take that into account, thank you.

I will expand my vocab got it

Yes and to avoid that kinda mistake I will review all the chapters in translate and listen

Will do.

OK, I will take that into account, I will make the sentences shorter and more paragraphs so they eyes can rest

The reason is explained in the next chapter but I am working on the synopsis

that is good btw

The characters seem well fleshed out, worldbuilding is solid but, you should update more frequently, on the first day I published a short prologue and the first chapter, but other than that, its all good