Viniboy

I have to give my most sincere congratulations to the author of this story, although it's still in the beginning, each chapter released instigates my curiosity more and more, making me anxious for the next one, you know very well how to create good hooks to continue your story. However, I noticed a certain difficulty in describing the characters, as the introductions are very brief and lack details, but I know that as the story progresses this will improve a lot! Keep writing, you're pretty good at it😁

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I agree with the other guy, there are some parts of the text that are pretty rushed, i also think u may work a little bit better on how you describe the characters and their actions (maybe their looks description is a little too generic). Apart from that, I am interested to read the next chapters, i believe that the more you write, the more you will improve in these aspects that I mentioned. Don't stop writing🥰